Monthly Archives: January 2018

The Noble Pen for Feb 1, 2018

Next Noble Pen Meeting

February 1st, 2018 at 7 pm

Scott’s Family Restaurant

1906 Blairs Ferry Rd NE, Cedar Rapids

News

The authors planning to have a booth at the Cedar Rapids summer Farmers Markets will have a meeting Feb 1 at 6:30 at Scott’s Restaurant (just before the Noble Pen meeting) to discuss planning and fill out the application.

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Cracked Walnut is a traveling literary group based in Minneapolis. They will be doing a prose and p**try reading in Cedar Rapids, 7 pm Saturday Feb 3 at Peoples Church, 4980 Gordon Ave NW (a block west of Jacolyn Park).  See link for information.

Victories

The Farmers Market group has 14 authors involved and are finalizing plans for displays.

Aime edited one third of Scourge.

Jeremiah finished reading a 700 page fantasy book.

Ciuin was recommended by someone she had helped in the past and another author now wants her to work with him.  If she takes the job, it would involve typing a handwritten manuscript and ghostwriting the middle of his novel.

Education

Participial phrases can be tricky to apply correctly.  The participle is a verb form (action word) which most often, but not always, ends in -ing.   Participial phrases are attached to a complete sentence to modify or supply additional information about the subject or object noun (person or thing) of the sentence.  Here a discussion of participial phrases.

For example, “Rowing the heavy boat, John soon tired.”  The participial phrase “Rowing the heavy boat” is not a sentence because there is no subject person to do the rowing.  “John soon tired” is a sentence, but needs the added phrase to explain why John, the subject of the sentence, became tired.

The phrase should be set off with commas from the sentence as above, or in “Pulling into the driveway, the noisy car alerted the occupants of the house.” The noun should always be the nearest one to the phrase that modifies it.  It would be incorrect to write “Pulling into the driveway, the occupants of the house heard the noisy car” because the phrase appears to modify the nearest noun, occupants, not the intended noun, car.

The present participle implies simultaneous actions.  “Walking into the building, John opened the heavy door” obviously violates the order of events, since he can’t walk in until after he has opened the door.  “Chugging her beer, she laughed in his face” can’t happen all at once; pick an order and rewrite accordingly.

Another way to supply additional information is a prepositional phrase.  Taken all together, the phrase acts as an adjective or adverb, but is not a sentence in itself.

A preposition is a relational word (from, in, on, under, behind, before, etc.) and the phrase includes a noun object (or other words operating in place of the noun) to complete the relationship.  For example, “The box sits under the table.”  The basic sentence “The box sits.” is technically complete, but not terribly informative.  The addition of the preposition “under” and its object “table” tell us a lot more.

Here is some further explanation and some examples of prepositional phrases.

Upcoming Schedule

February 1
Stacie S. 10-minute educational
Nick
Stacy H
Riley

February 8
Randy
Stacie S
Open slot

February 15
Aime
Stacie S
Open slot

February 22
Randy
Ciuin
Open slot

March 1
Nick
Jeremiah
Open slot

Keep Writing,
Bill

The Noble Pen for Jan 25, 2018

Next Noble Pen Meeting

January 25th, 2018 at 7 pm

Scott’s Family Restaurant

1906 Blairs Ferry Rd NE, Cedar Rapids

News

You may be interested in an event about “Turning Inspiration into Story”, to be held 1-4 pm Saturday Jan 20th in Marion.  See link to register for free.

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The first of this year marks the 200th anniversary of the publication by Mary Shelley of Frankenstein, a strong candidate for the title of First SciFi Book.  This essay takes it as a warning of what technology could do to us.

Victories

Randy now has six reviews on Amazon with an average of 4.5 stars.

Stacie is at 60k words and expects to finish at 80-90k.

Education

Many tools can help with the initial editing of your story by pointing out things a human might miss.  A quick on-line search finds many tool offerings, free or for sale.

MS Word includes a grammar checker.  As with any tool, it isn’t always right but will point out things to consider.

Grammarly is a browser or MS Office add-on that checks whatever you type.  It is context sensitive, which is an advantage over many other tools. Some of our members use the free (nagware) version and find it helpful.

ProWritingAid offers free registration for their on-line proofreading tool that checks many aspects of your writing. They also sell a variety of tools.   You paste a section of your text into the free version window, click submit and analyze, and it reports over-used words, sentences of monotonously same length or excessive length, cliches, repeated phrases, alliteration, and other things you may want to consider changing.  It also highlights dialog tags so you can see at a glance what you used.

It helped me a lot, but became tedious after I changed the major offenses.  My biggest complaint is that it reports too much.  I even tried a better writer’s material with the same result.  The highlighting of repeated common 2-word phrases, 2-word alliterations(like “to town” or “an apple”), etc. results in clutter that hides the things I want to find and change.  The homonym finder is a nice idea but appears to have no context sensitivity so you see ALL of them.

The author of Writer’s Diet book of advice offers a free on-line test of your writing.  While not as extensive as Pro Writing Aid, another view is often useful.

There are also on-line forums where you can post work for critique by others, gain experience in doing critiques, and discuss writing topics.  One is writingforums.org where you have to do some critiques during a waiting period before you can post your own work.  Critiques there can be harsh.  An issue with such forums is that postings may be “publication,” so it is best to only post small samples.

Does anyone have recommendations for other tools?

Upcoming Schedule

January 25
Jeremiah
Randy
Ciuin

February 1
Stacie S. 10-minute educational
Nick
Stacy H
Uriah

February 8
Randy
Stacie S
Riley

February 15
Aime
Stacie S
Open slot

February 22
Randy
Open slots

March 1
Nick
Open slots

Keep Writing,
Bill

The Noble Pen for Jan 18, 2018

Next Noble Pen Meeting

January 18th, 2018 at 7 pm

Scott’s Family Restaurant

1906 Blairs Ferry Rd NE, Cedar Rapids

News

Should Noble Pen organize a booth for area writers at CR’s summer farmers’ markets?  The idea was discussed at our meeting.  If you want to get involved in organizing it, let us know.

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The ability to produce meat without killing animals has been demonstrated, using laboratory-grown animal cells, with hope of commercializing it.  Might there be a story in that to be written about the social impact?

Star Trek has always shown concern for the social foundations of society (recall the early episode on white-black versus black-white?) and what makes us human (the Borg?), as well as suggesting technological ideas.  A new book explores how Treknology has influenced and may continue to influence us both technologically and socially.

Victories

Ciuin wrote on Chessmaster.

Education

The “blurb” testimonials usually seen on the back covers of books are a common marketing device, intended to convince the reader that this is a book worth reading.   The word blurb was coined in 1907. A search for the terms blurb request will find many articles about getting people to help you by writing them.

Noelle Sterne has some thoughts about gathering testimonials.  Here’s another view, saying the blurbs are a small factor in readers choices but still worthwhile.  Best-selling authors get too many requests to comply unless you have some  connection to them.  More advice on requesting a blurb.

Upcoming Schedule

January 18
Aime: 10-minute educational
Stacie S.
Aime
Ciuin

January 25
Jeremiah
Randy
Ciuin

February 1
Stacie S.  10-minute educational
Nick
Stacy H
Uriah

February 8
Randy
Stacie S
Riley

February 15
Open slots

Keep Writing,
Bill

The Noble Pen for Jan 11, 2018

Next Noble Pen Meeting

January 11th, 2018 at 7 pm

Scott’s Family Restaurant

1906 Blairs Ferry Rd NE, Cedar Rapids

News

We recently discussed having more educational material at meetings. Ciuin presented a short session on January 4th,  Aime  will do one on January 18 and Stacie in the future. Do we want longer educational times? Let us know your thoughts.

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Authors of works set in “current time” face a challenge to keep from immediately appearing dated.  Brands change.  Technology changes.  Fashions change.  Your newsletter editor found his story was outdated upon completion in 2008 by having such things as pay phones (yes you could still find one then if you searched).  You don’t know what will change next year.  M. T. Anderson’s essay considers the problem.

It’s tough to make predictions, especially about the future. ~Yogi Berra

Victories

A ten-minute educational session went well.

Nick finished a chapter.

Randy sold out of his book and has to order more copies.

Ciuin is close to finishing Chessmaster’s Pawn.

Stacy H is having Shannon edit her story.

Education

It is often said we must write what we know, although that is oversimplifying things.  But even when imagining situations and worlds, we start from our experiences.

Do you feel like your life is not bringing you interesting ideas for writing?  Elizabeth Sims suggests doing a few things out of your comfort zone to bring on new ideas and knowledge.  Just think it through and don’t risk more than you can stand to lose.

Whether you get risky or not, make the most of the ordinary experiences around you.  Watch people.  Notice settings.  Sims suggests eavesdropping.  That’s usually pretty low-risk.  But don’t just follow a conversation.  If you can be unobtrusive, notice the actions and expressions that go with that conversation.  Go beyond just watching.  Observe.  Describe the characters, their actions, and their tone of voice in your mind.  Some day those descriptions may appear in your novel.

You can observe a lot by watching. ~Yogi Berra

If you are not willing to risk the unusual, you will have to settle for the ordinary.  ~Jim Rohn

Upcoming Schedule

January 11
Ciuin
Randy
Stacie S.

January 18
Aime: 10-minute educational
Stacie S.
Aime
Ciuin

January 25
Jeremiah
Randy
Ciuin

February 1
Nick
Stacy H
Uriah

February 8
Randy
Open slots

Keep Writing,
Bill