Next Noble Pen Meeting
Apr 19th, 2012 7 pm
1906 Blairs Ferry Rd NE, Cedar Rapids
We are planning to have a discussion on comma splices at the next meeting. If anyone wants to contribute tutorial material, let the moderator know.
Dylan has passed the half-year mark in his quest to write a weekly serial that runs for a year. It is about 6-8,000 words a week. He rejected a commission to write something that was too distasteful.
Bill, in a rare move, spent several hours organizing the plot of his novella.
Ciuin was asked by a very respected leader to be the paid educational director for a new Romani group that is starting up, and will be writing history material for home-schooling.
Shannon has sold a few copies of his book.
Inner monolog, putting in a character’s thoughts, is a specialized form of dialog for which the rules perhaps aren’t as clear. One published author makes a good point about how clumsy italicized inner monologue (or quote marks around thinking, for that matter) can be, and gives an outstanding example of how much better third person sounds while effectively conveying that the character is thinking.
This article doesn’t condemn inner monologue entirely, but says that it should be done sparingly and carefully because it treads a line. The way people actually think is in fragments. Grammatical sentences won’t sound like thinking and actual thinking won’t be easy to read.
Another consideration is the narrator distance. If you are writing in omniscient third person, i.e. the narrator may know things the main character does not, then first person inner monologue will stand out as a point of view change.
If you are writing close third person, i.e. all from the character’s POV but told as third person, then a first-person inner thought will be only a subtle change. Used sparingly, it can emphasize the thoughts without quotes or italics.